Profile Review - 29F

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I'm passionate about people. Nursing, nurturing, serving. I care deeply about people. I'd like to say all people... and yet, I'm a work in progress.
You should think about re-writing this. You should have more detail about why you care about people and what you do to care about them. The last sentence has a negative connotation to it.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I'm looking for someone that values people and has a heart to serve people using the gifts that they've been blessed with. Someone that is considerate of the needs of others while understanding the balance of when to step in and when it's not their place.
This is good.

Occupation: Medical Receptionist for psychiatric practice, nurse, and student This immediately raised questions in my mind. If you are a nurse why are you working as a receptionist. You need to talk about being a student in your profile somewhere, probably in the Additional Information section.
Age: 29
Height: 5' 4"
Wants Kids: Yes
Kids at Home: No
Ethnicity: White, non-Hispanic
Religion: Christian
Drinks: A few times a year
Smokes: Never

The most influential person in my life has been:
There have been many people that have impacted me in the different seasons of my life. Mostly friends that see my heart and remind me of whom I am and who God is when I need reminding.
This is good though you may want to give an example or two of how a particular friend got you back on track to being who you are.

The three things which I am most thankful for:
Family - We're not perfect, but we grow individually together - blood relation as well as those that I surround myself with and share life with.
Friends - Everybody needs somebody sometimes! I'm grateful for those that are near and far, those that I talk to daily, and those that I talk to rarely yet know that I can always call them friend.
Provision - The Lord has blessed me abundantly! I'm thankful for where I am in life. I got here by grace alone and I'm excited to see how His plan unfolds!
I like this. However, you are getting dangerously close to talking about religion too much. I would remove the God part from your Most Influential section as you have addressed that here with better words.

Three of my best life-skills are:
Raising and/or caring for children
Remaining calm yet resilient during a crisis
Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
I think I've come across as rude before...but I think that's because I'm from the east coast. The south isn't always ready for my bluntness. I have learned to choose my words much more wisely than I used to.
I don't like this at all. It is not at all flattering to you. You should do a complete re-write on this section.

The things I can't live without are:
Good spiritual advice
Supportive friends/family
A place or way to serve
Coffee
Music/worship
OK, you stepped over the line on the religious thing here. I already know that you are a Christian and that this is an important part of who you are. God made you a mulch-faceted person, you have very little space in your profile to show all of these facets. Use them wisely. BTW music and worship do not necessarily tie together.

The first thing people notice about me:
I'm genuine. I'm a really awful faker/liar. It used to be a matter of "what you see is what you get"... but I've learned to add a little bit of tact and wisdom in the delivery. LOL
I don't like this at all either. It does not put you in a good way. "faker / liar", whoa, she is admitting that she lies Don't want to date someone who is going to lie to me ... close.

Some additional information I want you to know:
I'm kinda nerdy. My sense of humor is... well I guess most people don't get me until they get to know me. But I'm easily entertained and find humor in a lot of things.
FYI "kinda" is not a word. I am going to let it slide as a lot of people do talk that way, but you may want to change it to "kind of" to be correct. This would be an excellent place to talk about being a student.

I typically spend my leisure time:
What I do is not nearly as important to me as who I'm doing it with. I can join in or tag along with most anything. I even enjoy watching from the sidelines as much as joining in. I'm a people watcher and it's always the people that count. So as not to be a complete party pooper, some of the things I specifically enjoy are movies, reading, joy riding, window shopping, and just hanging out.
I would take out reading, it is a solitary activity and is covered in the Last Book section. I would also find better terminology for "joy riding". Also I "hang out" with friends not with those whom I date, you may want to find better terminology for this as well.

The last book I read and enjoyed:
My last read was Uncle Tom's Cabin. I've been trying to read classics in between semesters and was honestly surprised to like this one as much as I did since I was much less enthused with the few before it. This book has so much wisdom in it. I loved the Old English and how much emotion was packed into this story. I definitely appreciated the historical aspect of this novel and the thought provoking perspectives. All that on top of characters that I easily fell in love with makes it highly recommend to friends.
This is good. A well written book report.

My friends describe me as:
Funny
Loyal
Sweet
Thoughtful

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I'm passionate about people. Nursing, nurturing, and serving is a big part of who I am.
I left this pretty vague because the answer is best known by getting to know me. A person's passion is not as easily expressed as this.
I would actually add just another sentence or two...maybe explaining how/why you got into nursing....IE; "When I was 12 years old and my best friend cut her leg, I sprang into action with wrapping her leg, and running to get help"

Sharing a bit about yourself is good as you have to get to the date first...before they can get to know

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I'm looking for someone that values people and has a heart to serve people using the gifts that they've been blessed with. Someone that is considerate of the needs of others.
The first part of the sentence is a no brainer...someone who 'values people'....that should be pretty much every single person you intend on dating...same thing with considerate of others...would you date anyone who wasn't? Of course not..
And the rest sounds like you are trying to recruit for volunteer positions and not a date...
This entire answer is all too generic...

Just dig a bit deeper...If you really want to share volunteering with them...then say something like, "I like to always make time each month to volunteer for "xyz"...I'm looking for someone who would like to share this with me as well as I would be happy to come along and share in what is important to you"

(Also...try not to end a lot of sentences with prepositions..like 'with'...

Your end of sentence above would read, "using the gifts with which they've been blessed".

Occupation: Medical Receptionist for psychiatric practice, nurse, and student
Why would this raise questions? This is what I do. I have two different jobs while I'm trying to juggle school. It's fairly common for someone climbing a ladder to have multiple balls in the air. It's exactly like it says... What message does NOT expanding on this relay to matches?

I think you can just leave out the Psychiatric practice...

Age: 29
Height: 5' 4"
Wants Kids: Yes
Kids at Home: No
Ethnicity: White, non-Hispanic
Religion: Christian
Drinks: A few times a year
Smokes: Never

The most influential person in my life has been:
There have been many people that have impacted me in the different seasons of my life. Mostly friends that see my heart and remind me of whom I am and who God is when I need reminding.

I think I'll leave this as is for now.
Your choice...but it's just so bland...with just a few tweaks it could be more interesting...Can't you think of even one person (don't write their full name but just reference them)

The three things which I am most thankful for:
Family - We're not perfect, but we grow individually together - blood relation as well as those that I surround myself with and share life with.
Friends - Everybody needs somebody sometimes! I'm grateful for those that are near and far, those that I talk to daily, and those that I talk to rarely yet know that I can always call them friend.
Provision - I am so abundantly blessed! I'm thankful for where I am in life. I got here by grace alone!

Three of my best life-skills are:
Raising and/or caring for children
Remaining calm yet resilient during a crisis
Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
I just took this out for now. I see what you're saying and I'm not sure what I want to put on this yet.



This is also a place to put in a charming/cute anecdote to make it a bit playful.

The things I can't live without are:
Supportive friends/family
A place or way to serve
Took some of these out as well. It's supposed to be this clever telling hint about a person... I really don't think it is. I'm going to hold of on this bit.

Again...make this playful but truthful..
I put things like:
my morning coffee (made by yours truly)
my tech toys like Blu-ray, EVO, HDTV....(Just think, just 10 years ago those would be a foreign language or some acronym for a governmental dept.)

The first thing people notice about me:
I'm genuine. I'm a really awful faker/liar, so I couldn't be one even if I wanted to be. It always works best for me to say what I really mean and be who I really am.
Got it. Tweaked it. Hopefully this says what I mean a bit better.

Sorry..but you should take and leave out the awful faker/liar...Again...you are saying things that should be obvious to your matches.

I think this whole section still needs changing. Do you have this great but loud laugh that make people turn their heads? Do you have this secret love for watching Brady Bunch? This doesn't have to be so serious...

Some additional information I want you to know:
I'm kind of nerdy. My sense of humor is... well I guess most people don't get me until they get to know me. But I'm easily entertained and find humor in a lot of things.
Fine! Tweaked.
If you are saying you are kind of nerdy...then go on to explain a few things that describe HOW you are nerdy...
Maybe put the sense of humor in the above category with a bit of a description.

I typically spend my leisure time:
What I do is not nearly as important to me as who I'm with. I can join in or tag along with most anything. I even enjoy watching from the sidelines a lot of times. It's the people that count. So as not to be a complete party pooper, some of the things I specifically enjoy are movies, driving to no specific place, window shopping, and just hanging out.

You aren't answering the question...they want to know your interests....(I would take it all out and start over on this question)
Do you like hiking, biking, cooking, photography, love for documentary films....etc...Name some things you enjoy doing with your time but leaving room for them to picture themselves in your life...

Example..."I love a great hike out in the Blue Ridge mountains and would love to find someone crazy enough like myself once in awhile to get up before dawn, grab some coffee/breakfast, and then get started on a hike to see the sunrise" or "I really enjoy snuggling on the couch on a Sunday morning with the iPad and discussing the stories. And then after attending the morning service to be free and cheer on my favorite football team the Patriots"..

Just examples of putting your interests in, but talking about sharing these with a partner.
The last book I read and enjoyed:
My last read was Uncle Tom's Cabin. I've been trying to read classics in between semesters and was honestly surprised to like this one as much as I did since I was much less enthused with the few before it. This book has so much wisdom in it. I loved the Old English and how much emotion was packed into this story. I definitely appreciated the historical aspect of this novel and the thought provoking perspectives. All that on top of characters that I easily fell in love with makes it highly recommend to friends.

It would behoove you to put a sentence or two about WHY you enjoy this book..Many may not remember when they read it in school or only vaguely know it has to do with slaves so you should either be more descriptive or choose another book. Unless you are only looking for men who have read and remember all the 'classics'...it's best to not rely on their bad memory or wrong assumptions about the book.

My friends describe me as:
Funny
Loyal
Sweet
Thoughtful

Better? Am I date-able yet?

When you open yourself up to the revision process, people are going to make comments on your profile, and, in some cases, who you are as an individual. It's going to take some thick skin, but, if you get better matches, it's worth it. Try to keep in mind, people assume you are a good person. They just want to make sure your profile reflects this.

One thing you may consider in your first question, what you are passionate about, you have about 2-3 sentences to convince someone why they shouldn't close you. I absolutely agree that it takes time to get to know someone's true passion, but you have to interest someone just enough to keep reading through the rest of your profile. To some degree, dating and marketing are closely related.