Profile Review, 18F

Hey all! I know I'm on the younger side for this site (I am almost 19, but I feel like that's redundant), but I've had my share of bad dates, blind dates, and my-best-friend-says-he's-perfect dates; I thought it might be time to take it into my own hands and give this a try.

So, that being said, please give my profile a look? I'm brand new to this.

The one thing I am most passionate about:
This section is great as is. Adding the couple of details suggested below could personalize it further.

I've always been deeply involved with field hockey; I play on my university's varsity team (What position?) and love every second of it. I also spend a lot of time painting, and have even done custom paint-jobs for helmets and skateboards. I also have a great passion for economic and political equality as it relates to indigenous groups, (Such as?) and have made those issues the core of my educational experience.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I'd love to meet a really easy-going person that's good for a few laughs, but can be dependable and serious when need be.

The most influential person in my life has been:
My kid brother, because he always takes every situation with a sense of humor, and he's given me some pretty good advice in recent years

The three things which I am most thankful for:
My parents and closest friends; how they've all been there with (for?) me through the (delete "the") thick and thin.
My passion for sports and art
The opportunities (Such as?) that I've been given in the past year and the direction they've taken me

Three of my best life-skills are:
Remaining calm yet resilient during a crisis
Making art and culture an ongoing part of my life
Being a good friend and companion

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
I know I can come off pretty serious at first glance, but my friends know that I can have a pretty wild party side every once in a while and that I have an intense love for all things country. What does country mean to you? Country music? Living in a rural area? Farm life? What?

The things I can't live without are:
Field hockey
Good food and beer
Music
Tons and tons of books
My friends

The first thing people notice about me:
People tend to notice that I enjoy doing what I do, and that gives me a positive outlook on all aspects of my life

I typically spend my leisure time:
This is a well-written section, however consider revising it. You discuss books under your 5 things, and again under the last book. Reading is also something that you can't do with a date...well not for the first few dates anyway. Are there activities that you enjoy that could be shared with a date? Add those here. Show him how he might fit in your life.
Also fwiw, semi-colons may be used when you have two simple sentences that are related in thought. You're using them incorrectly.

I love to read; My favorite authors are Murakami and Louid de Bernieres, and I tend to re-read their books a lot. Being active takes up a large part of my "leisure" time; I play field hockey on a few teams, and back at home I used to compete in longboard races. Also, I really love to window shop, and I'll occasionally come home with a new pair of ridiculously high heels.LOVE high heels! The higher, the better!

The last book I read and enjoyed:
You can add the stuff on books from the previous section here

I recently read Murakami's book "South of the Border, West of the Sun", and loved how the storyline flowed. Murakami is able to capture the most intense feelings with very few words.


And that's it!

Hey all! I know I'm on the younger side for this site (I am almost 19, but I feel like that's redundant), but I've had my share of bad dates, blind dates, and my-best-friend-says-he's-perfect dates; I thought it might be time to take it into my own hands and give this a try.
I have to wonder about this. School should be an excellent source of finding dates. There are classmates, you play sports, you like food and beer, plus all the activities that are associated with the university. The demographics of eHarmony are skewed more toward middle aged people and have few in 18 - 20 age group. I really would suggest that you save your money and "take it into my own hands" by being more proactive around school.

So, that being said, please give my profile a look? I'm brand new to this.

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I've always been deeply involved with field hockey; I play on my university's varsity team and love every second of it. I also spend a lot of time painting, and have even done custom paint-jobs for helmets and skateboards. I also have a great passion for economic and political equality as it relates to indigenous groups, and have made those issues the core of my educational experience.
This is good.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I'd love to meet a really easy-going person that's good for a few laughs, but can be dependable and serious when need be.
Re-write this. I am always turned off when I read a profile that says "I like to laugh". While fun and laughter are good things when appropriate, life is primarily serious business, even if you are a standup comic. You above all should know this, You are in university with a focus on "economic and political equality" this is not a laughing type subject. You play varsity sports, you don't go on the field to laugh and have fun, you go to win.

The most influential person in my life has been:
My kid brother has been influential because he always takes every situation with a sense of humor. He's given me some pretty good advice in recent years.
Made grammar checker happy. You may want to mention the kinds of good advice your brother has given you.

The three things which I am most thankful for:
My parents and closest friends; how they've all been there with me through the thick and thin.
My passion for sport and art
The opportunities that I've been given in the past year and the direction they've taken me
This is good. Though there should be periods at the end of each one.

Three of my best life-skills are:
Remaining calm yet resilient during a crisis
Making art and culture an ongoing part of my life
Being a good friend and companion

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
I know I can come off pretty serious at first glance, but my friends know that I can have a pretty wild party side every once in a while and that I have an intense love for all things country.
This is good but you may want to add more to the "country" part.

The things I can't live without are:
Field hockey
Good food and beer
Music
Tons and tons of books
My friends
This is OK.

The first thing people notice about me:
People tend to notice that I enjoy doing what I do, and that gives me a positive outlook on all aspects of my life.
This is good.

I typically spend my leisure time:
I love to read; my favorite authors are Murakami and Louid de Bernieres, and I tend to re-read their books a lot. Being active takes up a large part of my "leisure" time; I play field hockey on a few teams, and back at home I used to compete in longboard races. Also, I really love to window shop, and I'll occasionally come home with a new pair of ridiculously high heels.
You should take the reading part out of this section and just talk about it in the Last Book section.

Then expand on activities that you engage in, would like to share and would like to try. In other words if I don't play field hockey or wear ridiculously high heels what are we going to share.

The last book I read and enjoyed:
I recently read Murakami's book "South of the Border, West of the Sun", and loved how the storyline flowed. Murakami is able to capture the most intense feelings with very few words.
Move what you have about reading above and then expand on this. Make it sort of like a book report.

And that's it!