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Goodvibrations is offline Goodvibrations Post #1  January 11,2012, 9:34pm
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Hey, hey! Thank you for taking a second to look over my profile. I put quite a bit of information in here, which I imagine is useful for someone that wants to learn more about me. However, since you are lending a hand, it might save some time to look over just two or three of the topics. Let me know if anything stands out to you, or sets off a red flag. Now...if only I could give out karma...

[It seems I'm nearing the end. I came up with an answer for "What is the ONE thing that people DON'T notice about you right away that you WISH they WOULD?" Let me know how it reads.]

What are you most passionate about?

In a word, people. In a paragraph? After graduating college I felt as though I had missed something in my education. I spent some time reading and self reflecting to ultimately realize that just because someone is intelligent, doesn’t mean he is socially intelligent. So I came out of my shell. I changed my major and went back to college. I attended social organizations. I hung out with friends at every opportunity. I ran for officer positions and learned how to lead others diplomatically. I plan to some day pass on the skills I’ve learned by pursuing a Ph.D. in Social Psychology.


What is the most important quality that you are looking for in another person?

There is this turning point that comes as you sit there talking to someone late at night. You're laughing at something, maybe the climax of a story, and while it wasn't told as a joke, you laugh because you know what it was like for that person. You feel this connection, a vibe, and as the air settles, a small voice reminds you that just days before you were strangers. I am looking to connect with someone emotionally stable, someone content with her life but looking for someone to share it with. Relationships are great. They allow us to feel the protection of a warm embrace. But, it’s always nice to find someone that can stand on her own.


Other than your parents, who has been the most influential person in your life and why?

I remember, some time ago, borrowing a book from Dr. Wesley. I made it halfway through before, unfortunately, putting it down. About a year later during a lecture she mentioned that she had given up on lending out books as they never returned. Recalling the forgotten book, I promptly finished it, and, preparing an apology, went to visit her. As I told her the story, she just laughed and said, “Oh, I learned that lesson years ago.” Taking the book, she signed it, “To my good friend, Chase.” I hold onto this story as a reminder of the importance of forgiveness, even for such a small thing as a book.

What are the THREE things for which you are MOST thankful?

My supportive family. Without them, I would not be the person that I am today. I am extremely fortunate to have them.

The friendships I have formed over the years. I appreciate my close circle of friends in whom I can confide and trust.

The environment that I live in. I am grateful that I live in a nation where I am free to think, express myself, and speak out publicly.

Other than your appearance, what is the first thing that people notice about you?

People usually mention my upbeat nature. I look at the glass half full. You can usually find me on campus talking to various friends about economics, politics, psychology, sociology, what’s up with Katy Perry and Russell Brand, or how hot Michael Bublé is(seems the answer is VERY). I try to find that one thing someone is interested in and run with it. People tend to notice.

What is the ONE thing that people DON'T notice about you right away that you WISH they WOULD?

My sister had a son not too long ago. Since I was on break, I went down to visit her and help her with him. I would watch him while she slept, as she didn’t get much. One night, as I was rocking him, I became aware of this sense of vigilance, this sense that under my watch nothing would happen to either one of them. Looking back, I realized that I have always been that way. Sometimes friends need defending when they’re not there. Others, someone has to find out what that noise was in the other room. I do these, often without thinking, and I doubt my friends would ever notice.



How do you typically spend your leisure time?

Sometimes after a long day on campus, I’ll relax to some Chopin or classical rock. Lately I’ve been listening to The Beatle’s experimental phase and Guns N’ Roses. I attend social organizations centered on religion, secularism, and psychology. I attend most of their activities, everything from Relay for Life to dodge ball tournaments. Hands down, I enjoy one-on-one conversations with friends and hanging out with my inner circle of friend the most. We often dine out, catch movies, play board games, or just sit around my apartment and shoot the breeze.

What are five things that you "can't live without?"

Working out

iPods/iPhones/iPads

Banana bread & Yorkshire tea

Music

Comedy

Describe the last book that you read and enjoyed. What was it about? What did you like most about it?

I recently read The Evolution of Desire by David Buss. It takes an evolutionary perspective on the different approaches men and women utilize in their search for relationships. I find Evolutionary Psychology absolutely fascinating because it explains the Why questions. Why do we seek out relationships? Why do form friendships? Why are cupcakes the most amazing things ever? I read science fiction from time to time. A friend introduced me to The Wheel of Time Series, which I am slowly making my way through.

Is there any additional information you would like your matches to know about you?

Since last March I have made working out a significant priority in my life. I work out three times a week with a friend and keep pushing myself to outperform the week before. Ideally, I am looking for someone who also enjoys staying physically fit.
Additionally, I’m a big fan of comedy. I do not watch T.V. often, but when I do, I watch Colbert and The Daily Show. I like stand up comedians and certain series, such as The Office, Family Guy, Dexter, and House.



Here is the original version for anyone interested.
The second version is in my second post, below.

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What are you most passionate about?

In a word, people. In a paragraph? After graduating college I felt as though I had missed something in my education. I spent some time reading and self reflecting to ultimately realize that just because someone is intelligent, doesn’t mean he is socially intelligent. I decided then and there that I would spend as much time as it took to fully develop myself and my social skills. Over time I understood that people more than anything else are the key to self actualization. The relationships we cultivate and maintain shape who we are today and who we will be tomorrow. Ultimately, this decision led me to pursue a career in Social Psychology.

What is the most important quality that you are looking for in another person?

There is this turning point that comes as you sit there talking to someone late at night in a coffee shop. You're laughing at something, maybe the climax of a story, and while it wasn't told as a joke, you laugh because you know what it was like for that person. You feel this connection, a vibe, and as the air settles, a small voice reminds you that just 30 minutes earlier you were basically strangers. I am not sure if I know a name for this quality. I think of it as a social intuition. Are you engaging and maintain the flow of the conversation, or are you listing your favorite sparkle vampires as I wonder how I can politely check the time?

Other than your parents, who has been the most influential person in your life and why?

I remember, some time ago, borrowing a book from Dr. Wesley. I made it halfway through before, unfortunately, putting it down. About a year later during a lecture she mentioned that she had given up on lending out books as they never returned. Recalling the forgotten book, I promptly finished it, and, preparing an apology, went to visit her. As I told her the story, she just laughed and said, “Chase, I learned that lesson years ago.” Taking the book, she signed it, “To my good friend, Chase.” I hold onto this story as a reminder of the importance of forgiveness, even for such a small thing as a book.

What are the THREE things for which you are MOST thankful?

I am thankful for my supportive family. Without them, I would not be the person that I am today. I am extremely fortunate to have them.

I am thankful for the friendships I have formed over the years. I believe it is important to know how to make friends and build relationships regardless of where you roam. I appreciate my close circle of friends in whom I can confide and trust.

I am thankful for the environment that I live in. I am grateful that I live in a nation where I am free to think, express myself, practice the religion of my choice, and speak out publicly even if my views were to differ from those of the government. I am grateful for college campuses and institutions where people can come together to learn and debate openly.

Other than your appearance, what is the first thing that people notice about you?

Shortly after,”You’re tall,” comes,”You’re funny.” I’m not out there trying to entertain anyone. I simply try to talk about the things others enjoy. I’ve learned that my life is only as fulfilling and productive as those of the people around me. I’ve also learned that the right quip or the right story can turn a person’s day around. Good vibes are contagious. It’s my job to go out there and spread them. Asking people how they’re doing, really listening to them, and giving them hope that things will get better, THESE are the things I try to do.

“You’re funny.”

‘Maybe.

So, tell me about that Chinese place you were checking out.’

What is the ONE thing that people DON'T notice about you right away that you WISH they WOULD?

I often hear from others that they do not think I have emotions. What I think they mean is that they have never seen me lose my cool, which is absolutely true. I try to stack the deck as best I can to stay positive. However, anger, sadness, anxiety, they do come up, but I see them for what they are. I deal with them quickly and don’t let them control me. I feel. I know the nostalgia you get looking back at the good times, how small you seem standing at the top of a mountain trail, and that serendipitous feeling when someone you just met is into that same thing, too. These are great feelings. And I enjoy sharing them with those around me.

How do you typically spend your leisure time?

On most nights you can find me bouncing between social organizations on campus, attending meetings and the activities they plan. One day I may be running Relay for Life. Another, I may play dodgeball. However, I also leave time for myself. I believe rest and relaxation are just as important as being social. Some evenings, I may put on some soft jazz or classical piano and stretch out on the couch. Being an introvert by nature, I need time by myself to recharge. Since I work best one-on-one and in small groups, I often invite my inner circle of friends over to watch movies or hang out.

What are five things that you "can't live without?"

Family -Don't tell them I called them things

iThings -And that's how I got 20 things at once.

Banana Bread/Tea -Cheating!? That's hardly fair

Music-That's pretty mean for this being MY profile

Air - Hmph! See if I answer your silly questions

Describe the last book that you read and enjoyed. What was it about? What did you like most about it?

I recently read The Evolution of Desire by David Buss. I'm a big fan of Evolutionary Psychology books and am currently in the process of a literature review for my Thesis. I do read fiction from time to time, mostly science fiction. I would read more classical books but I just watch the movies instead. Saves time. They're pretty much the same thing anyways...hmm...where...did they put...sarcasm font...hmm...nope...Oh well, never mind...Oh, you're still there. I'll have you know it is poor form to listen in on someone's internal dialogue. Go find Jacopo. He'll show you out.

Is there any additional information you would like your matches to know about you?

Do not be surprised if I make you work a little for personal information. I'm not trying to hide anything or be mysterious. I just don't buy into the idea of a date being a glorified job interview. If you're clever, you can always get the information you need. Rest assured, I will eventually give you what you want...though I may frustrate you for your trouble. Just remember, play nice. No sense in anyone getting hurt.
Edit: For various changes to the original
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Overall good profile...keep in mind that the long prose that's the habit on match doesn't translate well to the eH format.
Describing a click on a match coffee date for "most important quality in another person"... is odd. It sounds like you do100s of these (to no avail) and now are trying out eH.

Best to reread the sections /questions and actually respond to them to highlight or showcase aspects of yourself, your lifestyle or some interests and activities...not just philosophy lectures.

Self-help books are usually not a plus. Also filling up sections with repeated philosophies from books, etc is boring.
There is more of a flavor, from the writing of multiple self-help philosophies being spouted and hidden behind than any sense of who is the profile about.

What is this: "Do not be surprised if I make you work a little for personal information"?........just reads very weird..the entire section is strange, defensive and screams major baggage....You may want to ditch the pick-up books and this section.

With some rethinking /rewording and editing to avoid redundancies, repetition and getting to the point ....this will be a great profile. Keep in mind women are checking out tons of profiles and long-winded ones will come off as boring...Good Luck..
 
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Here is the second revision in its entirety.

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What are you most passionate about?
I am passionate about education. I try to catch guest speakers and concerts on campus. I am constantly looking for new skills to pick up, dance lessons this semester, and improving on the ones I have, playing the piano. I plan to continue the cycle and someday teach others as a professor.

What is the most important quality that you are looking for in another person?
I am looking for someone emotionally stable, someone content with her life but looking for someone to share it with. Do you have goals and aspirations? Relationships are great. They allow us to feel the protection of a warm embrace or a connection with another. But it’s always nice to find someone who can stand on her own.

Other than your parents, who has been the most influential person in your life and why?

I remember, some time ago, borrowing a book from Dr. Wesley. I made it halfway through before, unfortunately, putting it down. About a year later during a lecture she mentioned that she had given up on lending out books as they never returned. Recalling the forgotten book, I promptly finished it, and, preparing an apology, went to visit her. As I told her the story, she just laughed and said, “Oh, I learned that lesson years ago.” Taking the book, she signed it, “To my good friend, Chase.” I hold onto this story as a reminder of the importance of forgiveness, even for such a small thing as a book.

What are the THREE things for which you are MOST thankful?

I am thankful for my supportive family. Without them, I would not be the person that I am today. I am extremely fortunate to have them.

I am thankful for the friendships I have formed over the years. I appreciate my close circle of friends in whom I can confide and trust.

I am thankful for the environment that I live in. I am grateful that I live in a nation where I am free to think, express myself, and speak out publicly.

Other than your appearance, what is the first thing that people notice about you?

People usually mention my upbeat nature. I look at the world half full. When I’m around others I try to add a little fun to situations. I’ve heard I’m a good conversationalist, and that I can talk with just about anyone. I try to stay well versed so that I have at least a little in common with someone.


How do you typically spend your leisure time?

I enjoy working out with one of my close friends. We have been doing a 5x5 routine since March, but are about to switch to P90X because of its popularity. At home I often listen to music, mostly jazz and piano. I stay active in my social organizations to get some variety. Some weeks we volunteer, others we play dodge ball. More than anything I enjoy one-on-one conversations with friends, usually over dinner.

What are five things that you "can't live without?"

Family/Friends

iThings

Banana Bread & Tea

Music

Comedy

Describe the last book that you read and enjoyed. What was it about? What did you like most about it?

I recently read The Evolution of Desire by David Buss. I'm a big fan of Evolutionary Psychology books and am currently in the process of a literature review for my thesis. I do read fiction from time to time, mostly science fiction.

Is there any additional information you would like your matches to know about you?

I’m a big fan of comedy. I do not watch T.V. often, but when I do, I watch Colbert and The Daily Show. I like stand up comedians and certain series, such as The Office, Family Guy, Dexter, and House.
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Overall very well-written profile. Nice use of detail, conversational in tone, and thoughtful. You come across as educated and, until the Additional Info section, serious about dating. These are two huge positives in my book.

Now for the negatives--
#1
I would insta-close you for the Additional Info section. You sound like a player focused on torturing your girlfriends with mind games. NEXT!!

#2
Last read: Use the first 3 sentences. Delete the rest, which was a turnoff. Thesis should not be capitalized.

#3
What you wish more people would notice: Think carefully about what the question is asking, and more importantly, what your answer says about you. I had a very negative reaction to the first sentence in particular. You struck me as the type of guy who bottles up his emotions and slaps on a happy face, while the negativity seeps out in passive-aggressive ways. (Couple this with your Additional Info write-up, and you would be lost in the depth of the skid marks I left behind.)

#4
Do not use another person's full name in your profile. Respect her privacy. Personally, I would just use her first name. Were you a child when she wrote the note? I found it quite odd that one adult writing another adult would sign a note with Miss *First Name*. Or maybe you're from the rural South? At any rate, please make sure that you delete her full name in your first post here as well.

#5
Much of your humor falls flat or comes across as just plain weird. Might be best not to try. Humor is very hard to do well on "paper." Few are good at this.

You have a good start. With some re-writing, this will be very strong while staying true to who you are. There were a few minor typos, but I expect these will get eliminated in the re-write.

Best of luck!
 
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Thanks, Emma for the feedback. I purposely didn't use my name or her last name for the sake of privacy. However, I will try to rewrite the section so it doesn't include names.

I am in the process of rewriting the personal information section after Wiseman’s recommendations. I try to think outside the box, and sometimes it doesn't have the effect I'm aiming for.

Once again, I appreciate you taking the time to read through it and share your thoughts.
 
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What are you most passionate about?

In a word, people. In a paragraph? After graduating college I felt as though I had missed something in my education. I spent some time reading and self reflecting to ultimately realize that just because someone is intelligent, doesn’t mean he is socially intelligent. I decided then and there that I would spend as much time as it took to fully develop myself and my social skills. Over time I understood that people more than anything else are the key to self actualization. The relationships we cultivate and maintain shape who we are today and who we will be tomorrow. Ultimately, this decision led me to pursue a career in Social Psychology. There is a bit of a stereotype out there that most psychologists/psychiatrists need mental help more than their patients do. This paragraph, as written, puts you right into that group. Personally, I would not read past this before hitting the close button. So, might want to consider how to rewrite this to avoid this image.

What is the most important quality that you are looking for in another person?

There is this turning point that comes as you sit there talking to someone late at night in a coffee shop. You're laughing at something, maybe the climax of a story, and while it wasn't told as a joke, you laugh because you know what it was like for that person. You feel this connection, a vibe, and as the air settles, a small voice reminds you that just 30 minutes earlier you were basically strangers. I am not sure if I know a name for this quality. I think of it as a social intuition. Are you engaging and maintain the flow of the conversation, or are you listing your favorite sparkle vampires as I wonder how I can politely check the time? The simple word you are looking for is "connection". Also, I'd delete that last sentence because it's poorly worded and off putting.

Other than your parents, who has been the most influential person in your life and why?

I remember, some time ago, borrowing a book from Dr. Robbins. I made it halfway through before, unfortunately, putting it down. About a year later during a lecture she mentioned that she had given up on lending out books as they never returned. Recalling the forgotten book, I promptly finished it, and, preparing an apology, went to visit her. As I told her the story, she just laughed and said, “Chase, I learned that lesson years ago.” Taking the book, she signed it, “To my good friend, Chase. –Miss Mary.” I hold onto this story as a reminder of the importance of forgiveness, even for such a small thing as a book.
Please remove her full name from here.
What are the THREE things for which you are MOST thankful?

I am thankful for my supportive family. Without them, I would not be the person that I am today. I am extremely fortunate to have them.

I am thankful for the friendships I have formed over the years. I believe it is important to know how to make friends and build relationships regardless of where you roam. I appreciate my close circle of friends in whom I can confide and trust. This is really preachy and too long. I'd stick with just that first sentence and delete the rest. Writing too much is just as bad as writing too little.

I am thankful for the environment that I live in. I am grateful that I live in a nation where I am free to think, express myself, practice the religion of my choice, and speak out publicly even if my views were to differ from those of the government. I am grateful for college campuses and institutions where people can come together to learn and debate openly. This is nicely written but also very long. You are not saying anything unique or even interesting here. Might want to trim it up a bit and get to the point faster.

Other than your appearance, what is the first thing that people notice about you?

Shortly after,”You’re tall,” comes,”You’re funny.” I’m not out there trying to entertain anyone. I simply try to talk about the things others enjoy. I’ve learned that my life is only as fulfilling and productive as those of the people around me. I’ve also learned that the right quip or the right story can turn a person’s day around. Good vibes are contagious. It’s my job to go out there and spread them. Asking people how they’re doing, really listening to them, and giving them hope that things will get better, THESE are the things I try to do. The above is a jumbled overkill of stuff. You open up with I'm funny. However, you then launch into look at what a good guy I am and what a great listener I am. Trim this up, be more precise, less self help book flavored preachy and more to the point.

Delete below. It doesn't make any sense and doesn't come across as humorous when read.

“You’re funny.”

‘Maybe.

So, tell me about that Chinese place you were checking out.’

What is the ONE thing that people DON'T notice about you right away that you WISH they WOULD?

I often hear from others that they do not think I have emotions. What I think they mean is that they have never seen me lose my cool, which is absolutely true. I try to stack the deck as best I can to stay positive. However, anger, sadness, anxiety, they do come up, but I see them for what they are. I deal with them quickly and don’t let them control me. I feel. I know the nostalgia you get looking back at the good times, how small you seem standing at the top of a mountain trail, and that serendipitous feeling when someone you just met is into that same thing, too. These are great feelings. And I enjoy sharing them with those around me.
This again is too much writing going off on a tangent that reads major past relationship baggage. Also, in your dating profile, you want to focus on what's positive about you. This basically reads passive/aggressive, emotionally closed off personality.
How do you typically spend your leisure time?

On most nights you can find me bouncing between social organizations on campus, attending meetings and the activities they plan. One day I may be running Relay for Life. Another, I may play dodgeball. However, I also leave time for myself. I believe rest and relaxation are just as important as being social. Some evenings, I may put on some soft jazz or classical piano and stretch out on the couch. Being an introvert by nature, I need time by myself to recharge. Since I work best one-on-one and in small groups, I often invite my inner circle of friends over to watch movies or hang out. That last sentence reads a bit odd. Time spent with friends is not work.

What are five things that you "can't live without?"

Family -Don't tell them I called them things

iThings -And that's how I got 20 things at once.

Banana Bread/Tea -Cheating!? That's hardly fair

Music-That's pretty mean for this being MY profile

Air - Hmph! See if I answer your silly questions

Your commentary above will make women think that your medication wore off.
Describe the last book that you read and enjoyed. What was it about? What did you like most about it?

I recently read The Evolution of Desire by David Buss. I'm a big fan of Evolutionary Psychology books and am currently in the process of a literature review for my Thesis. I do read fiction from time to time, mostly science fiction. I would read more classical books but I just watch the movies instead. Saves time. They're pretty much the same thing anyways...hmm...where...did they put...sarcasm font...hmm...nope...Oh well, never mind...Oh, you're still there. I'll have you know it is poor form to listen in on someone's internal dialogue. Go find Jacopo. He'll show you out.
Although I appreciate your attempt at humor here, it really doesn't come across all that well.
Is there any additional information you would like your matches to know about you?

Do not be surprised if I make you work a little for personal information. I'm not trying to hide anything or be mysterious. I just don't buy into the idea of a date being a glorified job interview. If you're clever, you can always get the information you need. Rest assured, I will eventually give you what you want...though I may frustrate you for your trouble. Just remember, play nice. No sense in anyone getting hurt.Huh? This reads like some weird combination of baggage, jaded, bitter, game player in need of therapy. No thanks. Next match please!
My comments above. Please understand that I'm not commenting on you as a person, only on how what's written comes across. While you are an accomplished writer, the image your writing paints leaves a lot to be desired. I'm an introvert, I'm passive/aggressive, I'll be hard to get to know, I need to be left alone - would you want to date this person? Probably not. Your profile needs to focus on what's positive about you.

Two pieces of advice about writing a good profile. One is write as if you are speaking to a person. Strive for a more conversational tone. I can tell from your writing style that you are reading a lot of psych books at the moment and it's seeping into your profile and not in a good way. Two is if your humor is witty and situational, dependent on timing and tone of voice, it won't translate well to written word. In that respect, it's better to figure out one humorous remark that does come out well in text and put it in, than to make multiple attempts that fall flat.
 
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As always...DF goes straight to the things that I was thinking

OP...I'm not sure if you want to share your other photos that you have on your profile (you can add them to your album on your EHAdvice profile on these boards)...

I'm not trying to hurt your feelings....just sharing some honest feedback...The photo you have for your avatar, if I didn't see your age...made me think you are closer to 40...

I think because you are wearing a suit...and it's not a good quality photo...It actually looks like an older print photo almost which 'dates' it..(Obviously it may not be...but it just seems that way)

So...if you choose...we can help make sure that you are putting the best photos out there that closely represent who you are the best they can..

I think with just some tweaks here and there with your profile...it is pretty darn good coming from a 28 year old guy!

Good luck...
 
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Dancing, I think you sum it up quite well. I am used to writing academically. I have never written an online profile, and I have no experience with online dating. However, this is why I am here in the advice forums. I think I have a better understanding, now, of the voice I need to employ.

I was a bit reticent to include that I'm an introvert in my profile. I imagine it would be better to let the matching do its job and not state it publicly. I think it still caries quite a negative connotation in this society. I will leave out my moral philosophies, as well. They do tend to help make my responses into blocks of text.

Ingy, If there's one thing I excel at, it's taking constructive feedback for what it is. I am here to make sure my profile presents the best version of who I am. I realize that the impressions you all receive is not a reflection of who I am, but a miscommunication on my part. I just need to try a different writing style. I will see about posting my pictures in the forums. I can use all the feedback I can get.




I think I am seeing a consensus, here. It is time to rebuild this thing from the ground up. I appreciate your feedback. If it's not too much trouble, would you mind taking another look at it tomorrow? I imagine you will find it to be radically different.

Edit: To respond to Ingy
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It's fine to use names, but not full names that identify the person. For example: my uncle, Rob, or my neighbor, Mary, makes a profile feel more personal. In your case, you gave away her full name over a couple of sentences.

When you revise, post the new version rather than revising the original post. It makes the feedback process easier.

Best!
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I have finished the revisions. I tried a more direct voice. Let me know if it worked.
 
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