Godrules500 is offline Godrules500 Post #1  December 30,2011, 9:09pm
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haha. When I say Jesus dying for my sins I mean dying to save me for my sins but since you mistook what I meant I changed it.

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I'd have to say that riding my horse is one of my favorite things to do. It is a great time for me to relax and it is a great time for me to hang out with my family. Fortunately, we board them on 40 acres so when we don't feel like trailering somewhere, which is most of the time, that is where we tend to ride.


The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I want someone who is in Love with Jesus Christ. I am looking for someone with a good sense of humor and who enjoys laughing and having a good time. I'd like for them to enjoy being active but at the same time they don't mind sitting around and watching a movie.

Basic Information
Occupation: Computer Programmer
Age: 25
Height: 5' 10"
Wants Kids: Yes
Kids at Home: No
Ethnicity: White, non-Hispanic
Religion: Christian
Drinks: Never
Smokes: Never

In my own words
The most influential person in my life has been:
My youth pastor invested a lot of time in me and has greatly helped shape me as a believer and as a person. He showed me that putting God before myself is more important than anything and that wisely choosing my friends who believe the same way I do will help make my walk with Christ much stronger and much easier.

The three things which I am most thankful for:
Jesus dying to save me from my sins.
My Family.
My Friends.

Three of my best life-skills are:
Sharing my beliefs through teaching, participation, and example
Being a good friend and companion
Finding new adventures and unique experiences

The things I can't live without are:
My family.
My friends have truly helped make my life a lot easier and a lot more enjoyable.
My dog and my horse are two of my best buds/partners in crime.
Books. At night when there is nothing to do it is nice to sit back, relax and pass the time away by getting lost in a book.
Outdoors. I really enjoy getting out and getting away from the tv or computers (my job).

The first thing people notice about me:
That I am usually happy and in a good mood.

Some additional information I want you to know:
I’m a fairly relaxed guy who enjoys laughing. I love playing most sports and being active. In college, I played intramural softball and football and now I play softball with the church whenever the season comes around.

My interests
I typically spend my leisure time:
I enjoy spending my time either outdoors or doing some kind of activity. Sitting at home all day on the weekends feels like I've wasted my day and got nothing accomplished. At the same time, I don't have to constantly be on the go. I really enjoy watching movies, playing cards or board games, or reading fantasy books.

The last book I read and enjoyed:
I recently finished reading The Hunger Games. It is a fantasy book. I really enjoyed how the author spent a lot of time developing the characters and the plot. Half the time I spent reading this I felt like I was on the edge of my seat. One of the things I liked about the books is that you don't have time to get bored reading it because there is always something going on.
I am also currently listening to the Wheel of Time (2nd time through). I usually only listen to audio books while I'm driving. It really helps the 50 minute drive fly by a lot faster!

According to my friends:
My friends describe me as:
Easy-Going
Spiritual
Loyal
Thoughtful
Last edited by Godrules500; January 2,2012 at 2:29pm. Reason: Profile update
 
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Lucid is offline Lucid Post #2  December 31,2011, 8:22am
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Well.. I can't offer a whole lot as I'm not a religious person and I don't know much about your "lifestyle" (for lack of better term). But what I can offer is what I come away with after reading your profile.

1. You love your God.
2. You have a mild goofy side to you.
3. You are a computer programmer who doesnt drink or smoke
4. You lost a fight with a horse and ended up with a reading habbit.

Now I know I'm not your target audience, but I know that this profile is pretty vague and doesn't give a match much to think about when it comes to who you are. You just got NEXTed.

So take some time to fill out the questions in more detail, give your match something to think about and something to talk about when it comes to the Open Communications stage. Instead of just listing the things you hare thankful for, add why you are thankful for those things, same goes for Things you can't live without. You mention Jesus Christ throughout your profile multipul times, there is no need to repeat yourself. I do understand that you love him for his sacrifices that he gave you but you only need to make that point once and its backed-up by having him also in your Thankful section, twice is enough. Maybe put something else in your "Passionate About" section. If you need help finding another passion, theres a thread I posted:
http://advice.eharmony.com/boards/da...r-passion.html (Finding Your Passion)
Give it a quick read, it should help you out. You volunteered at a Christian Camp in Colorado, do you enjoy it there? Do you do that work often? How about horses? Just something to think about, I'm sure the post I've directed you to will get you thinking enough.

Good luck and hope to see this profile updated soon.
 
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emma_hazards is offline emma_hazards Post #3  January 1,2012, 3:57pm
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I'll preface my review by saying that this is about the impression created by your profile. That is all your matches will have. It is not a critique of you as a person.

Your profile needs major work. Here's what it told me: You're a Christian who once worked with horses, and you engage in immature, moronic behavior. You sustain concussions from head-butting contests with horses and get stuck sliding face down in the ice. Are you trying to be a clown or attract a woman?!?

Once you remove the glaring negatives, what about this profile highlights how you differ from every other guy in your small group? Why should I want to date you versus your friend or your youth pastor? I'm just beaten about the head with your love and devotion to Christ. I get that! But why should I actually want to date you? Tell me something positive about yourself. Why should a match select you over any other devoted Christian? Focus on what makes you unique (in a good way) in each section.

If you were to see a cute girl in the congregation one Sunday, what would you say to her to "sell" yourself as date material? What would you say about yourself as you tried to get her to hang out with you the next weekend? Why should she pick you over one of your buddies who is also flirting with her after the sermon?

Think about that and then rewrite your profile.

Now for your photos--

You need a good, clear close-up of your face. (If you weren't squinting, cropping photo#4 would have worked for this purpose.) You should be smiling, relaxed, and looking directly at the camera. No baseball caps, hatwear, or sunglasses.

You also need a good "body" shot that shows everything from the tip of your head to the ground under your feet. Your body shape should be discernible, and you should be standing...not sitting, not squatting, etc. No heavy winter wear. No tables, large friends, or giant objects providing partial cover. A match should be able to pick you out of a crowd quite easily based on these two pictures. After all, should you have a date, that is exactly what she will have to do, and it's in your best interest not to create surprises.

Picture #1: Worthless save for showing your hobby! Your face is obscured and you're heavily clothed. You look shorter than you probably are, and stout.

Picture #2: Delete! What I have to say is not nice.

Picture #3: Was hoping you were the cuter guy in the foreground. Once I saw the next picture, I realized you were the guy behind the table in the background. I hope you get my drift and understand why this picture has to go as soon as you have better pictures.

Picture #4: I would use this as your profile picture until you get something acceptable. It's also the only one I would leave in (as a "hobby" picture) once you get decent photos.

Putting together a good profile is tough. Work on it, and then re-post for some additional tweaking.

Best of luck!
 
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Godrules500 is offline Godrules500 Post #4  January 1,2012, 9:17pm
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Ok i put up a revised copy. Sorry it took so long, this was a lot more difficult than I thought it would be. I imagine there are still many errors in it but hopefully it is a little better.

And with the pictures, I definitely agree, especially with the first 2! the 4th one (most recent) is my profile picture and the 3rd one was the only other picture I could find. I just lost 30 pounds (and still losing) so I am slightly running short on pictures lol. I'll try and get at least one or two tomorrow.
 
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It's usually best not to list young adult novels on your profile. Hunger Games was entertaining and the issues it addresses (quite graphically) are adult ones though, so I'm not sure in this case.

If you have been impressed or enthralled by something else recently, you might want to use it instead.
 
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Godrules500 wrote :
Ok here is a revised copy. I hope it is at least a little better.

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I really like riding my horse and spending time with my friends and family.
This is a bit brief. Why do you like riding your horse, how does it make you feel? Where do you ride? Do you ride alone or is this where you spend time with your family and friends?

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I want someone who is in Love with Jesus Christ. I am looking for someone with a good sense of humor and who enjoys laughing and having a good time.
This is OK but is a bit brief.

 Basic Information
Occupation: Computer Programmer
Age: 25
Height: 5' 10"
Wants Kids: Yes
Kids at Home: No
Ethnicity: White, non-Hispanic
Religion: Christian
Drinks: Never
Smokes: Never

In my own words
The most influential person in my life has been:
My youth pastor invested a lot of time in me and has greatly helped shape me as a believer and as a person.
This is a bit brief. What is it that your youth pastor invested time doing with you? How did this shape you? Give examples.

 The three things which I am most thankful for:
Jesus dying for my sins. (Your youth pastor did not do a good job. Jesus died on the cross to SAVE you from your sins.)
My Family.
My Friends.
Nearly every profile I see the person is thankful for their friends and family.

 Three of my best life-skills are:
Sharing my beliefs through teaching, participation, and example
Being a good friend and companion
Finding new adventures and unique experiences

The things I can't live without are:
Family
Friends
Pets
Books
Outdoors
You can't put much here, but why can't you live without these things???

The first thing people notice about me:
That I’m a happy go lucky person.
This would say to me that you are irresponsible. Say it differently with different words.

Some additional information I want you to know:
I’m a fairly relaxed guy who enjoys having a good time. (This says to me that you are irresponsible) I love playing most sports and being active.
Tell me about the sports you play. Do you play on a league? What position do you play if they are team sports?
My interests
I typically spend my leisure time:
I usually spend most of my time outdoors or doing some kind of activity, going to watch a movie, or reading.
This is way too brief. Reading is a solitary activity.

The last book I read and enjoyed:
I recently finished reading The Hunger Games. It is a fiction book. I enjoyed the character development, the story/plot and the nonstop action of the book. I am also currently listening to The Wheel of Time (2nd time through)
Tell me about The Hunger Games, give me a book report. You say you are "listening" to The Wheel of Time. Do you often listen to audio books? If so then mention this in this section.

According to my friends:
My friends describe me as:
Easy-Going
Spiritual
Loyal
Thoughtful
Comments above in red.

Stuff in BOLD purple are corrections.

Your profile is very brief. After having read it I still don't feel that I know anything about you. You need to add a lot more details. And FWIW, writing about yourself is a very difficult task for most everyone.
 
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Godrules500 is offline Godrules500 Post #7  January 2,2012, 2:28pm
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Ok, newly revised. Again, I hope it is a little better
 
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Great job with the revisions! You now come through nicely in your profile. This is nitpicking--under Leisure, consider the following revision (in blue):

I enjoy spending my time either outdoors or doing some kind of activity. XXX and YYY are two of my favorites.

Pick one or two activities that you haven't previously mentioned. Ideally these should be things that you and a match might do on a date. You want to give her a sense of how she might fit into your life.

This looks fantastic otherwise. Best of luck with your search!
 
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