Mike74 is offline Mike74 Post #11  December 31,2011, 6:26am
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Hi. I am Jon. I go by jonbug. I have met with no success even with getting the simplest attention. I don't think I am looking "out of my league" but i still come up empty handed. Perhaps you all have some insight.




Other than your parents, who has been the most influential person in your life and why?


MY brother taught me so much and it wasn't all macho bull sh**

I agree with others about removing the curse words. Explain what your brother taught you, and how it has made you a better person. Use 2 or 3 sentences.



What is the most important quality that you are looking for in another person?

I prefer a strong woman. Strong but calm and peaceful.

I think I understand what you're saying: you're looking for a woman who has strenght of character, but is emotionally stable and caring. Say that. Again, use 2 or 3 sentences to elaborate on your point.


Other than your appearance, what is the first thing that people notice about you?

I am sneaky smart. That is to say, I am quiet about things but make intelligent moves that surprise people.

I agree that "sneaky" has a negative connotation. Perhaps say: "I'm smarter than I look! " and try to be humorous. Or, perhaps say: "Although I may be quiet at first, my mind is constantly at work, and I often surprise people with the intelligent moves that I make."


What is the ONE thing that people DON'T notice about you right away that you WISH they WOULD?


I have good insight. I'm not just a "worker bee.

This response is very similar to yor response to the prior question. Think of something different.


What are five things that you "can't live without?"

My music

Several of your pictures show you wearing an Iron Maiden shirt, and one shows you standing in front of a guy playing the bass. Music is clearly important to you, so focus on it in more detail elsewhere in your profile.

My son

More information about your son might be helpful.

My dogs

My Camera

NASCAR


Describe the last book that you read and enjoyed. What was it about? What did you like most about it?

It had to be "The Stand" The unabridged version. The rich and voluminous characters wrapped me up in their little, but hazardous world. I thought of the book even when I could't read it...like a soap opera.


Is there any additional information you would like your matches to know about you?

I value a chance to care. I love volunteerism. I work with delinquent youth and the elderly.

I would expand on this, and explain what kind of volunteer activites you typically do. If you feel strongly enough about volunteering, perhaps move it to your "most passionate" section.

What are you most passionate about?

Photography of nature.

I think you need to focus on more things in this section. Although the question asks for "one" thing, I prefer to list several things, with a short description of each, and why you are passionate about it.


What are the THREE things for which you are MOST thankful?

A well adjusted young man for a son.

The values my parents instilled in me and I thus instilled in my son.

The ability to listen, read between the lines and compromise.


How do you typically spend your leisure time?


I love hiking with my camera and finding places I have never been before though they are near home. Amazing things can be found within 10 miles from a person's home. Then I must have a picture of it. Usually a unique landscape.

This is generally good, although I would list more things in this section.

My comments are in blue above. Good luck!
 
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harnomygirl is offline harnomygirl Post #12  December 31,2011, 6:29am
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If the kid in the last picture is your son, it gives a really good idea of who you are and what a match might expect. If it isn't, then you should remove it.

The mixture of technology, nature and rock is good, so even if you use all new pictures, keep that motif if it really does describe your life accurately.
 
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Wiseman2 wrote :
Your screen name here has nothing to do with your eharmony profile or account.
Agree that the spelling, grammar and language needs some clean up.
Use each question /section to highlight a different aspect of yourself /interests /lifestyle.
Elaborate on your photography, volunteering and other interests, that women can envision as being positive.
"sneaky" is not a positive descriptor...consider rewording that section.
"strong woman " is...what? a huge weight lifter?.. a battle axe?.....be more descriptive of what this vague term means to you.
Overall good profile..just reword a bit and elaborate on some of the good points...Good Luck

Duh....to the above bold....dorky me was thinking that the first paragraph was something written in his profile.....So disregard my comment about the jonbug name....LOL!
 
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Ephemera is offline Ephemera Post #14  December 31,2011, 7:02am
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Jonbug,
I like the 'sneaky smart' thing. It's sexy as it makes you seem quirky and playful.

You're younger than I admit being the target audience of so maybe I'm not the one to comment but I love the rock tee shirts and the music theme of the pics. But smoking is not really very attractive to look at. I'm not against those who smoke though I do not, but a pic of it is not flattering. Also up the nose shots are not very flattering. I love your smile and the green backgrounds are good for you.

The curse words in one of your first answers are jarring and set off a negative tone. We all use those words (and worse) but the intro of the profile is too soon for them.

You cannot please everyone (so you've got to please yourself - Ricky Nelson) however, some people will find too much about your son as a sign that you have little room for dating, I personally do not date men that are in love with their dogs, and as you know - real men do not watch soaps and so would not use that reference though I do know the feeling you are striving for with the use. The 'more than a worker bee' phrase makes it seem as if you are a worker bee in a dead end job and trying to set yourself apart from that. I'd use a more positive approach to introducing my working life there.

Overall, to me, your profile shows you as upbeat, fun-loving and I'd not close (if you were the right age; if, if, if.....). Good luck to you.
 
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