Feedback on Profile - Part II

This is an excellent profile...interesting, informative,varied and very well written. ...There is only one phrase to consider editing out , because it undermines the otherwise ambitious, well rounded presentation.....that is : 'I’m a dreamer and I can’t help it"... just leave it out....it's too "omega male" .......You'll do very well....Good Luck

This is an excellent profile...interesting, informative,varied and very well written. ...There is only one phrase to consider editing out , because it undermines the otherwise ambitious, well rounded presentation.....that is : 'I’m a dreamer and I can’t help it"... just leave it out....it's too "omega male" .......You'll do very well....Good Luck

Hi guys,

Earlier this year I posted my profile for review and got some really great feedback. However, I had the fortune of meeting somebody off of this site while I was in the middle of incorporating the feedback I received. We have now moved on and with New Year's just around the corner I am ready to jump into this once more and give my profile a little touch-up. I would really appreciate any feedback.

Thanks in advance!

Basic Information
Sex: Male
Age 27
Height 5' 7"
Occupation: Software Engineer
Wants Kids: Maybe
Kids at Home: No
Ethnicity White, non-Hispanic
Religion: Christian
Drinks: About once a week
Smokes: Never

The one thing I am most passionate about:
One word: goals. I’m a dreamer. I was taught at a very young age that persistence and dedication pays off, no matter what you try to achieve. Ever since I was a kid, I have challenged myself to try new things and reach for those goals. Whether it is getting a promotion at work, learning how to cook, fixing something around the house or just planning my next fishing trip, I love to think about things I’ll be doing in the future and how I can achieve them. I like getting my mind set to a particular goal and do my best to get there.
I did a bit of re-writing of what you had. Take a look at it and see if you like my ideas.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
Honesty, chemistry and being comfortable around her are the obvious choices. However, I am also looking for somebody who is able to laugh at herself and feels comfortable in her own skin. I find this kind of confidence really, really attractive.
This is OK.

The most influential person in my life has been:
If I only get to pick one, I guess that has to be my best childhood friend Joel. I think that's because I've known him since we were 5 and we grew up together. At the time we were very different, but somehow we managed to become best friends. I guess we both learned how to help each other and how to build and keep true friendships despite our differences. That's something that I know is one of my strengths and I could say has helped me a lot through life. True story...
This is good.

The three things which I am most thankful for:

•Family/Friends for always supporting me and always being there no matter what.
•My Education, since it's helped me land an amazing job.
•The experiences I've had, both personal and professional since they've helped me forge my character.
This is good.

Three of my best life-skills are:
•Achieving personal goals
•Being a good friend and companion
•Maintaining a network of close friends

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
It might be that I'm actually smarter than I look! Ha, ha. All jokes aside, one of the things that people might not notice right away is how committed I am with the people around me. I value integrity a lot and if somebody's actions are in sync with their words I'm very likely to have a good relationship with them.
This is good.

The things I can't live without are:
•My loyal Grill! - I never miss an opportunity to have a great BBQ
•My music collection - I will listen to pretty much anything and I have a huge music library. I'm always listening to music while at work
•My guitar - Nothing like learning and perfecting the music you love on your favorite instrument. Great stress reliever.
•My bowling ball - I bowl in a league and have gotten used to my own ball, I can't use the house balls any longer!
•My toolbox - There is always something around the house that needs some fixing. I can't stand not having the right tools to get the job done.
This is good.

The first thing people notice about me:
Right off the bat it might be my accent, which is rather unique and people have a hard time figuring out where it comes from, ha, ha. However, it always lends itself to interesting conversations. Other than that, I am really easy going and approachable. I can get along pretty well with practically everybody and tend to establish rapport rather quickly.
This is good.

Some additional information I want you to know:
It looks like the designers of this site didn't think it'd be possible that somebody might actually have more than one ethnicity, so I'm just going to clarify this here. I was born in Monterrey, Mexico. My mom's American and my dad's Mexican. Even though I wanted to specify that in my profile, I couldn't because they'd only let me select one ethnicity. So, if you're really into learning Spanish, I only charge 20 bucks an hour (just kidding!). One more thing ... even though I chose guided communication, I'm totally OK with Fast Track if you prefer to communicate that way. If you'd like to know something else, please ask!
This is good. The ethnicity information is important so this is a good place to mention that. You may want to change the Fast Track to whatever it is called today, Fast Track is an old terminology that does not appear on the site today.

I typically spend my leisure time:
I enjoy many varied leisure activities. You can find me breaking a sweat at the gym, playing my guitar, or just cooking a nice dinner. If the weather is nice you'll definitely find me fishing in a nearby lake, or grilling at my place. I'm the kind of guy who enjoys a really cold Hefeweizen and hot wings in a bar, chilling out with my friends. What about karaoke? boating in the Puget Sound? dancing? whitewater rafting? a trip to the middle of nowhere to fight monster-sized fish in freezing cold weather? Or maybe hopping into my car and drive to San Francisco (in one shot)? Dare me. I'll do it again
The concept here is good. However, you should pose the part that I highlighted in blue as a question to your match if she would like to join you in these activities.

The last book I read and enjoyed:
I read a lot. However, I don't read fiction. I find that whenever I want to know a bit more about something, I just order a couple of books. That being said, the last one I ordered was Ray's Boathouse. It's a cookbook that focuses on Pacific Northwest cuisine and specifically around the menu in Ray's Boathouse restaurant in Seattle. I've tried several dishes from it and they are quite impressive, to say the least. If you ever get a hold of the book, you MUST try the Black Pepper Dungeness Crab… It's labor-intensive, but it is sooo good when it's finally ready!
This is good.

My friends describe me as:
Dependable
Modest
Good Listener
Loyal

Lol....never heard of it until someone on here mentioned it....To answer the question... rewording to "having a vision" or along those lines...sounds more concrete / less passive than the other.....wonder if the OP is Googling it..

When I posed my question to you on this I had not read the profile and was not aware of the context. I did a bit of a re-write for the OP on that sentence that you may find more comfortable.

One of the definitions of "Dreamer" in the dictionary is "Visionary". I wonder if you would assign Robert Metcalfe to be an "Omega Male"?