Profile review 24/F

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I'm passionate about both my job and politics. I love my job-I love being apart of creating memories for peoples special events. I also love politics. I like knowing what's going on in the world and being a part of a process that helps elect our leaders. I'm currently helping to campaign for Herman Cain. I'm worried about the future of our nation and I'm not sitting idly by. I'm not politically correct. I have to also add that when I was in middle school I felt a very strong calling to the mission field. Life has changed and faded that dream, but I am open to God calling me into the mission field in some capacity.
You have three distinct things here. It would be better to choose either your job or your political activities and focus on that. You can still end with the mention of mission work if you want if you tie it into what your main passion is.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I don't have a long list of qualities I want in my future mate, I feel like that's me trying to do God's job. However I know that I need someone who is mentally and physically strong with a moral compass that matches my own. I am a very strong and capable person; he must be at least as strong and capable as I am for me to even be attracted to him.
This is OK but a little tweaking could make it better.

Basic Information
Occupation: Cake Decorator
Age 24
Height 5' 10"
Wants Kids: Yes
Kids at Home: No
Ethnicity White, non-Hispanic
Religion: Christian
Drinks: About once a week
Smokes: Never

The most influential person in my life has been:
This is a tough one; I have had a copious amount of amazing people in my life. My Grandmother was an amazing woman and I learned through her how to love someone and accept their flaws.
This is OK but I would like to see an expansion on how your grandmother shaped your life.

The three things which I am most thankful for:

• The opportunity to be back in school.
• My relationship with Christ.
• My Family.

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
At the risk of sounding emo, I would like for people to notice I'm not as strong as I portray myself to be. I'm very good at appearing like I'm not the least bit vulnerable.
This is OK.

The things I can't live without are:

• My dog (what kind???)
• My Cell Phone
• My Car
• My job
• Friends/Family

The first thing people notice about me:
My innate leadership skills and responsibility.
This is OK but I would like to see more explanation on how you are a responsible leader.

Some additional information I want you to know:
I happen to be fluent in both Pig Latin and sarcasm. You know you're jealous =) I'm also just coming off the bench and putting a toe or two into the dating pool, so be nice.

I typically spend my leisure time:
I love taking my spoiled rotten dog hiking, hanging out with my friends (We happen to be pretty hilarious if I do say so myself!), and I love exploring new places and foods.
This is where you can really shine. This is where your matches are going to get the best view of your life style and how they would fit into it. You should expand on this some.

The last book I read and enjoyed:
To be honest, I haven't read in a while which makes me sad. I love to read. But I will tell you about the first book I ever read that made me feel like an "adult." It was called "The Lottery Winner" By Mark Higgins Clark. I read it over the summer at my grandparent's house before the 6th grade. I've been hooked on her ever since, and it's been something I've been able to share with my grandmother.
Did you mean Mary Higgins Clark???
This is good.

Thank you Gr8gyun2008 I appreciate your feedback and incorporated some of it into my profile.
ami-Thank you for your feedback but I will have to respectfully disagree. I can't think of anything in my life that I have been more passionate about than Herman Cain's nomination. Why would I not put this as the answer? And I don't identify with any particular party-just candidates who I feel best represents my beliefs.