stitch22015 is offline stitch22015 Post #1  May 11,2011, 6:55pm
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Thanks to everyone that posted feedback. I've made some revisions based on comments--which were helpful. Thank you!

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I am passionate about being a role model for my daughters. As any parent, I try to teach them through the life that I live. I want them to know that they are capable of anything they choose to do; that no one is perfect; that happiness is something we choose and that we never stop learning. I want them to always speak up for themselves and to not be concerned with what others think. Most importantly, I want them to live imperfectly--with great delight!
The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I am looking for someone that wakes up in the morning and says, "What is going to be amazing about today?" Someone that finds the little things in life are just as amazing as the big adventures. Having respect for others, as well as themselves, and taking pride in themselves and the things they do is important also.

The most influential person in my life has been:
My grandmother Polly. She taught me one of the most important lessons in life--that as long as you weren't physically hurt, then everything would work out as it should. Her patience in teaching me to cook was epic (as were her biscuits!) and her ability to make a point with just a look was amazing. She was gracious and accommodating--until it was time to be otherwise. Her lessons about life and love, most importantly to love unconditionally, helped shape me into who I am and what I believe in.

The three things which I am most thankful for:
• My daughters (ages 17, 11, 3 1/2)--three unique individuals that changed my life with each of their arrivals.
• My family.
• My friends.

Three of my best life-skills are:
• Continuing to expand my knowledge and awareness
• Being a good friend and companion
• Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things

The things I can't live without are:
• My daughters and family
• My best friend
• Music
• My camera
• Coffee and Dew!

Is there any additional information you would like your matches to know about you?
Music is very important to me. There is a genre and song for almost every situation, feeling and emotion. Music brings about strong reactions and can be tied to certain situations and people. It helps us express what we sometimes can't in any other way. It can be a release for anxiety and anguish as well as provide comfort for hurts and sorrows. Whether its a thumping bass beat of rock or rap, the gentle tones of a symphony, hip-swinging reggae, or the soulful melodies of blues and soul, there is a song for every feeling and emotion. I can still knock out a few notes on my flute, but these days my iPod is where I get my music "fix."

I typically spend my leisure time:
One of the things that I most enjoy doing with my free time is to take photos of the local landscape. As I go through my daily life, I frame things and see them as they would appear in a picture. Each day I work to refine that image until I can return with the camera to capture it. Time spent on or near the water is another thing that I enjoy--and need--immensely. The lapping of the water along the shore, the smell of salt in the air and the feel of the breeze on my face brings a sense of peace I can't find anywhere else.
 
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ami1uwant is offline ami1uwant Post #2  May 11,2011, 8:59pm
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This is much better. The issue will be match settings and profile photos.
 
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KikiAZ is offline KikiAZ Post #3  May 12,2011, 1:26pm
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Agreed! Reads very warmly.
 
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I don't know, you are such a good writer I think you can do better.

Think harder about who has been your influence in your life. Think a LOT harder, make sure it is your grandmother, which, btw, says nothing about you and your life journey as person independent from your family. It could be literally anyone, eg "Whoever it was who taught me how to say 'Now, you may be right but there's something about this that doesn't sit right with me.'"

Change what you say about music in the "additional information" to be what you are passionate about: in this way, take a stand on something that doesn't sound like a default. You sound like you said your daughters are your passion because that's what just happens to take up your time. Not flattering to anyone.

Talk about your best friend in the additional information section instead, elaborate, use the friendship as a way to show more facets of you.

Take out discussion of photography in what you do with leisure time; instead, focus on the connection to nature. Allude to the photography as an element of how you enjoy the nature experience.

Be more specific about what you are looking for in a partner, eg "I want someone to take care of," or "I want someone with whom to build a company/family/new life/be poor, be rich, and be fortified by the experiences in ourselves and our commitments to one another, I want a man who can really roll with it" etc.
 
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Great profile. Certainly one I would respond to with excitement if the other inputs were not deal breakers in some way.
 
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Rob625 is offline Rob625 Post #6  May 16,2011, 7:28pm
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I liked most of your profile. I see no problem with saying your children are important to you. You back it up with the details you give. No good man would be interested in a woman who is a bad mother. The part you might want to change is : I am looking for someone that wakes up in the morning and says, "What is going to be amazing about today?" Someone that finds the little things in life are just as amazing as the big adventures.

This sounds a little too "gee-whiz" and needy. Think about what is most important in a man for you, then discuss those things. If you want a cheerful man, I would just say ""I am attracted to a man with a positive outlook on life", or something to that effect. After things get started you can decide whether the man id cheerful enough for you. If you are concerned about your children, then you probably want to say something about the man liking kids, or being accepting, or some such thing. Otherwise, there is a disconnect between your description of yourself and what you say you are looking for in a man. To me this seems strange and could raise a red flag.
 
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