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DancingFool is offline DancingFool Post #21  January 6,2011, 9:58am
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Actually, I completely changed that entire section. I also added some humor to it:

Someone that can juggle and backflip. Also, independence and motivation/goals in life are important. It's attractive and admirable when someone knows what they want, and has the drive to work their butt off towards it. My ambition is to be able to juggle. If you have the patience to teach me how, I'll marry you on the spot and have your babies.


haha, I thought of that yesterday when I saw a coworker juggling 4 mandarin oranges. I was like "damn, I'd kill to do that!"


I also changed my profession from a boring "Engineer" to "Professional wikipedia surfer". I felt it might add some mystery and more humor. I kind of tie it in to the "first thing people notice about me" section. I also changed the list of things I can't live without.

The things I can't live without are:

  • Long weekends
  • Angry Birds and Sudoku
  • Snuggies
  • Dark chocolate
  • The snooze button


The first thing people notice about me:

I'm a curious cat. I spend hours on end geeking out to new hobbies. I'll pull out my phone to research something on Wikipedia on the fly. Sometimes even mid-convo, apologies beforehand... hence my occupation.
LOL....I like the changes. Adding humor is great! Except..... keep your profession/job honest. As is now, it will read as unemployed or paranoid about gold diggers or just plain trying too hard.

You know what you said in your previous post about not seeing relationship potential with a drunken party chick? Don't portray the same image yourself. A girl with brains will love the humor, but she'll be attracted to the geeky side of you as well, i.e. the fact that you have a brain and can hold an interesting conversation yourself is something she is looking for too. To me, the fact that the guy knows some interesting and off the wall geeky things is cool, the fact that we are chatting about it while hiking up a mountain - bonus....make that a huge bonus!

I think you've shown hands down that you are energetic and funny and interesting and otherwise a cool guy. Don't overdo it though and cross that fine line between cool and trying too hard.
 
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I still want to see the "Thing I'm most passionate about" tightened up. State the one thing, perhaps expand on it, then STOP!

I actually liked and vote for the "influence" question being your father. Someone stated we are all influenced by our parents, but very often it's a negative influence. (Sorry, Mom.) I think it would be encouraging that you came from a good family environment, not scarred by it.

I also liked that you will have her babies, thought it was funny. But, no forced humor.

In all, seems like it reflects you pretty well.
 
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DancingFool wrote :
LOL....I like the changes. Adding humor is great! Except..... keep your profession/job honest. As is now, it will read as unemployed or paranoid about gold diggers or just plain trying too hard.
Agree.

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I still want to see the "Thing I'm most passionate about" tightened up. State the one thing, perhaps expand on it, then STOP!
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I actually liked and vote for the "influence" question being your father. Someone stated we are all influenced by our parents, but very often it's a negative influence. (Sorry, Mom.) I think it would be encouraging that you came from a good family environment, not scarred by it.
Except the question EH asks is: "Other than your parents, who has been the most influential person in your life and why?" In my view, listing a parent means you have not correctly answered the question.
 
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Ok, I removed the joke about professional wikpedia surfer. However for the job, I just listed it as "Professional career".

I asked around and people have said stuff like: you don't want to make it seem as if you're gloating/boasting, don't want to attract girls into you for money, some girls may get too nerdy of a first impression, want to leave open some mystery so the girl thinks "i wonder what he really does", and gives something more to talk about later.

But you guys have a point too, don't want to force the joke. So I decided to just leave it at professional career, and leave them wondering what field it exactly is.
 
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xagent wrote :
Ok, I removed the joke about professional wikpedia surfer. However for the job, I just listed it as "Professional career".
Do what you want, but personally, I would view that answer as a belligerent non-answer for which I would be tempted to close.

Career is relevant information that can help your match gauge your level of education and busy-ness. How would you like it if your match listed her height as "somewhere between four and six feet tall"? Or if she used a photo of Daffy Duck? After all, guys should just her based on her personality and character, not her looks!
 
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Do what you want, but personally, I would view that answer as a belligerent non-answer for which I would be tempted to close.

Career is relevant information that can help your match gauge your level of education and busy-ness. How would you like it if your match listed her height as "somewhere between four and six feet tall"? Or if she used a photo of Daffy Duck? After all, guys should just her based on her personality and character, not her looks!
Totally agree. What's wrong with just listing your profession?- (I didn't read that part of the thread if it's there, sorry. ) I would definitely close out a match with a vague answer under profession. There's just too much to wonder about in that case....a woman has to ask herself, why wouldn't a man just list his actual profession?? I just closed an "ask me later," yesterday. What's the big deal? I can understand I suppose if you're trying to weed out gold diggers, but you can change the terminology somewhat. For instance, "medical field" can mean doctor, but also a phlebotomist. There's really no "nerdy" profession as long as what you write isn't supporting the fact that you're a total nerd.
I was just reading a profile of a computer programmer, who has pictures on surf board, is in a band and plays guitar. I thought the contradiction was super interesting!
Just my two cents.
 
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