31yr male Calling all reviewers! trying the peer reviewing.

I guess I've never had someone look at my profile critically. I've had friends peruse it and while their opinion helps I need the advice of someone "like" my matches. Someone that hasn't met me before and only sees the profile and what it says to them. So thanks in advance for any advice. Be as negative and positive as you want...its all information to be used.

The one thing I am most passionate about:

My mobile entertainment company, Djing, and event organizing. I love putting on an event that people get excited about. Where they walk away saying "i had a great time that was something different!" I am very proud of it.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:

putting others before self, compassion, the ability to compromise

First and foremost, I think it'd help if you elaborate more in this field... it's one of the first ones matches read, so it could stand to be longer.

And secondly, I don't know about mentioning "putting others before self"... certainly something to look for in a match, yes... but not something you want to write. Compassion communicates it well enough. Also, ability to compromise kind of implies you already know there are things about you they won't like and will have to compromise about. Comes off negative.

The most influential person in my life has been:

That would have to be my best friend. We have learned and grown together through each other's triumphs and failures. We have shared insights and concerns in tough times and continue to grow together. While mentioning your best friend is certainly a good thing, the rest of it just reads very generic. More specifics would help to make this more unique.

The three things which I am most thankful for:

* good solid friends. loyal and trustworthy to the end.
* loving parents that are ready to help when i need them and still ready even if i don't.
* for my life experiences, i regret nothing i have done nor the choices i have made. Maybe rephrase this one? Might sound cocky... I'd personally go with "I regret nothing I have done, nor any of the bad choices I have made (of which there were many... mostly when I was younger though, no worries! ) I have learned from them all."

Three of my best life-skills are:

* Creating romance in a relationship
* Being a good friend and companion
* Maintaining a network of close friends

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:

When people first meet me I have a very confident (not bossy or boastful) attitude, once I am comfortable with them they get to see the real me. Though I wish it were apparent when we first meet. Reads very strange. So your true self is not confident? Or is it Bossy and boastful? How bout focusing LESS on "this is the negatives they might notice first" part, and elaborate more on the actual things you'd like them to notice? The "real me" doesn't really say much either. The "Real you" should be what you're trying to show them without actually spelling it out.

The things I can't live without are:

* family and friends
* a beat to dance to
* trust
* passions
* spontaneity

The first thing people notice about me:

My voice tends to put people at ease and make them open up to me more, at least that is what they tell me later that they noticed. I like this... Never thought I'd ever see anything like this on a profile, lol. Fun to think about, and quite unique.

Some additional information I want you to know:

There are four primary ways to show someone love. They are: touch, words, gift (giving someone an object), and service (doing something for someone). Most people generally display 2 of them. Mine are touch and word. What are yours? Instead of making this into a lecture, how bout rewording it to read better? Something like "Of the four primary ways to show someone love (XX, XX, XX, XX) I have found that I display 2 naturally: XX and XX. What are yours?"

I typically spend my leisure time:

Reading, Movies (both DVD and theater), working on my house I just bought, getting together with friends, experiencing new people, places and things whenever possible! Though a quiet evening at home is never a bad idea either.

The last book I read and enjoyed:

Steven King's "Salem's Lot". Not a big King fan but it was a good read. Normally I enjoy Piers Anthony, Orson Scott Card, Terry Brook, and Tom Clancy. I enjoy books with twists and turns that get your mind and imagination working overtime. I love it when a book is so good you lose track of the world around you and get immersed in the story and lives of the characters.


My friends describe me as:

* Funny
* Dependable
* Good Listener
* Loyal

I can already see some things I want to change but let me know what you think.

The one thing I am most passionate about:

My mobile entertainment company, Djing, and event organizing. I love putting on an event that people get excited about. Where they walk away saying "i had a great time that was something different!" I am very proud of it.
Please fix your grammar and "I" is capitalized. The very first impression that you are giving your matches is awkward sentences and typos.
The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:

putting others before self, compassion, the ability to compromise

Make this a sentence rather than just a random list. Capitalize your first word.
The most influential person in my life has been:

That would have to be my best friend. We have learned and grown together through each other's triumphs and failures. We have shared insights and concerns in tough times and continue to grow together.

The three things which I am most thankful for:

* good solid friends. loyal and trustworthy to the end.
* loving parents that are ready to help when i need them and still ready even if i don't. Again, capitalize words properly. Also, reads like you still depend on mom and dad. I would stop with loving parents.
* for my life experiences, i regret nothing i have done nor the choices i have made. Caps

Three of my best life-skills are:

* Creating romance in a relationship
* Being a good friend and companion
* Maintaining a network of close friends

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:

When people first meet me I have a very confident (not bossy or boastful) attitude, once I am comfortable with them they get to see the real me. Though I wish it were apparent when we first meet. This really does not make any sense - do you lose confidence when you get to know people? Is your confidence faked and then the real insecure you shows up? I don't really know what your intent here was, but as written, it just brings up all kinds of negatives. This is a great place to show some humor rather than worry about giving a serious answer that people will read in a negative light.

The things I can't live without are:

* family and friends redundant
* a beat to dance to
* trust
* passions
* spontaneity

The first thing people notice about me:

My voice tends to put people at ease and make them open up to me more, at least that is what they tell me later that they noticed.

Some additional information I want you to know:

There are four primary ways to show someone love. They are: touch, words, gift (giving someone an object), and service (doing something for someone). Most people generally display 2 of them. Mine are touch and word. What are yours? Personally, I really dislike this kind of stuff in profiles. In your profile, use your own ideas and not some pseudo psych test. Also, "mine are touch" can read as "I'm going to be groping you and excusing it with this personality test."

I typically spend my leisure time:

Reading, Movies (both DVD and theater), working on my house I just bought, getting together with friends, experiencing new people, places and things whenever possible! Though a quiet evening at home is never a bad idea either. What do you do with friends, how exactly do you experience new people?

The last book I read and enjoyed:

Steven King's "Salem's Lot". Not a big King fan but it was a good read. Normally I enjoy Piers Anthony, Orson Scott Card, Terry Brook, and Tom Clancy. I enjoy books with twists and turns that get your mind and imagination working overtime. I love it when a book is so good you lose track of the world around you and get immersed in the story and lives of the characters.


My friends describe me as:

* Funny
* Dependable
* Good Listener
* Loyal

I can already see some things I want to change but let me know what you think.

The one thing I am most passionate about:

My mobile entertainment company, Djing, and event organizing. I love putting on an event that people get excited about. Where they walk away saying "i had a great time that was something different!" I am very proud of it.

keep this, ditch the rest. one thing.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:

putting others before self, compassion, the ability to compromise

pick one. you know, the most important thing.


The most influential person in my life has been:

That would have to be my best friend. We have learned and grown together through each other's triumphs and failures. We have shared insights and concerns in tough times and continue to grow together.



The three things which I am most thankful for:

* good solid friends. loyal and trustworthy to the end.
* loving parents that are ready to help when i need them and still ready even if i don't.
* for my life experiences, i regret nothing i have done nor the choices i have made.

Three of my best life-skills are:

* Creating romance in a relationship
* Being a good friend and companion
* Maintaining a network of close friends

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:

When people first meet me I have a very confident (not bossy or boastful) attitude, once I am comfortable with them they get to see the real me. Though I wish it were apparent when we first meet.

i'd ditch the red part. it sounds defensive.

The things I can't live without are:

* family and friends
* a beat to dance to
* trust
* passions
* spontaneity




The first thing people notice about me:

My voice tends to put people at ease and make them open up to me more, at least that is what they tell me later that they noticed.

Some additional information I want you to know:

There are four primary ways to show someone love. They are: touch, words, gift (giving someone an object), and service (doing something for someone). Most people generally display 2 of them. Mine are touch and word. What are yours?

this sounds like an abbreviation of the 5 love languages by Gary Chapman. if so, you're missing quality time (one of my favorites). odds are good other ladies may also see this similarity to the 5 languages he wrote about..which is good in that it provides a conversation point, i think?

I typically spend my leisure time:

Reading, Movies (both DVD and theater), working on my house I just bought, getting together with friends, and experiencing new people, places and things whenever possible! Though a quiet evening at home is never a bad idea either.


The last book I read and enjoyed:

Steven King's "Salem's Lot". Not a big King fan but it was a good read. Normally I enjoy Piers Anthony, Orson Scott Card, Terry Brook, and Tom Clancy. I enjoy books with twists and turns that get your mind and imagination working overtime. I love it when a book is so good you lose track of the world around you and get immersed in the story and lives of the characters.


My friends describe me as:

* Funny
* Dependable
* Good Listener
* Loyal

I can already see some things I want to change but let me know what you think.

Immensely helpful and thanks for the languages of love thing. I couldn't remember where I heard that at. I think I may end up removing that section and redoing it. Or I may just fix the version that's there.