Profile Review: what kind of person does this give you a feel for?

The one thing I am most passionate about: I'm most passionate about being happy, being challenged, new experiences, travel, experiencing new cultures, new tastes, enjoying the beautiful outdoors and laughter.

This is a list! Rambing lists lacking a theme are a bad way to answer all the questions which look for one thing.

Personally, I like the "being challenged" the most. I am not a fan of "most passionate for travel," as that is a hobby which isn't going to fit with my work demands / income. I close a lot of otherwise good matches for this (which may be an okay outcome for you.)

I also prefer not to see hobbies or recreational activity in this section; I would but these further down.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is: I don't think there is one single quality that is most important. There are too many that work in unison in finding that special person It's important that someone be positive--see the glass half full--and like to have fun and laugh!! Honesty, a sense of humor, trustworthiness, being humble and laughing at oneself are important.
I'm looking for someone that is honest with himself, someone who is quick to give, slow to take.

This is hopelessly overrun with baggage. I would close without reading further. Obviously people are presumed to be honest, so this is not a useful entry (what does she expect, liars will skip her?) Wanting to receive gifts isn't a winning idea, either.

I would not ask for a sense of humor; I would instead let my profile convey my own, such that similar people are drawn to me.

Of these entries, I find the positive outlook the best; I would expand on that (or find a way to rewrite with a new focus.) I prefer this section to be a veiled way to highlight something good about yourself, that may be intensely attractive to certain people - but not a list, demand, or expectation for matches to bring to you.

Basic Information
Occupation: Market Research Analyst
Age 37
Height 5' 4"
Wants Kids: Maybe
Kids at Home: No
Drinks: About once a week
Smokes: Never

Good.

In my own words
The most influential person in my life has been: There's isn't any one person who has been the most influential. There are so many positive qualities you can learn from others, whether they're friends, family or acquaintances. I find I am most influenced by seeing how others overcome hardships.

Not answering the question makes my eyes roll.

This is about the least important part of the profile, so, although I don't like the answer I would not close for it.

I would but the last sentence first, and try to work in something appealing about yourself because of this (one) person's influence.

The three things which I am most thankful for:

* My health
* My friends and family!
* Learning from past experiences

Boring and generic, but fine. I prefer to see indications of success or personal accomplishment (a family is not something one accomplished.)

Three of my best life-skills are:

* Continuing to expand my knowledge and awareness
* Being a good friend and companion
* Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
Honestly, I don't spend much time wondering what others notice but if there's something I wish they would notice it'd be that despite the silly ways, I have a sensitive side. I'm not one to hide much--so they see my sensitive, passionate, outspoken side pretty quickly.

This needs to be rewritten to remove the error: your sensitive side is either apparent or it is not, however it can not be both.

This is another question which is easy to get wrong, but hard to add anything useful with (I am fine with this answer, save for the error.)

The things I can't live without are:

* Good friends and their companionship
* Laughter
* Books
* Learning - intellectual stimulation
* New shoes

The first thing people notice about me: Not sure what others notice about me. I think it may be that I'm friendly and smile easily--I also find it easy to share light hearted conversations with strangers.

Some additional information I want you to know: I enjoy the simple things in life and am new to Portland. I'd like to get to know someone as friends first, see if we click and then take it from there. I love to laugh and I'm looking for someone to share my mischievous side with.

I would remove the "friends first." This is a dating site; "friends first" suggests not ready to date (e.g., due to the baggage above?)


My interests
I typically spend my leisure time: I enjoy spending time outdoors--I love hiking and try to get out as much as possible. I also like reading--mostly historical fiction. I love experiencing new cuisines. I do kickboxing (muay thai). At times, I just like to slow down and relax--this would mean relaxing at home with a good book and maybe watching a movie. In general, I'm am typically up for anything and like being on the go.

Time commitments are better off quantified.

Overall this is a bit problematic, in that you make conflicting statements: "relaxing at home" and "being on the go." I find this hard to judge how well I would fit with the match (though, since I tend to be limited in my time to be together, this is not a great concern for me.)

According to my friends:
My friends describe me as:

* Articulate
* Intelligent
* Spontaneous
* Hard Working

These are good choices.

The one thing I am most passionate about:

I'm most passionate about being happy, being challenged, new experiences, travel, experiencing new cultures, new tastes, enjoying the beautiful outdoors and laughter.
it say one thing and you have 7 lol... pick one or two and expand on them briefy.. Tell me why your passionate about travel.. or why how the outdoors makes you feel..
The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:

I don't think there is one single quality that is most important. There are too many that work in unison in finding that special person It's important that someone be positive--see the glass half full--and like to have fun and laugh!! Honesty, a sense of humor, trustworthiness, being humble and laughing at oneself are important.
I'm looking for someone that is honest with himself, someone who is quick to give, slow to take.
rewrite: you have some repetitive things in here, it just doesn't flow all together. The first two sentences are basically the same. honesty and laugh mentioned more that once.
In my own words
The most influential person in my life has been:
There's isn't any one person who has been the most influential. There are so many positive qualities you can learn from others, whether they're friends, family or acquaintances. I find I am most influenced by seeing how others overcome hardships.
You kind of avoid the questions but just tweeking the order of what you have.. might work..
example: I find I am most influenced by seeing how others overcome hardships. There are so many positive qualities you can learn from others, whether they're friends, family or acquaintances

The three things which I am most thankful for:

* My health
* My friends and family!
* Learning from past experiences
you could expand on them a bit..
My health... I run and eat organic whenever possible

Three of my best life-skills are:

* Continuing to expand my knowledge and awareness
* Being a good friend and companion
* Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things
fine.. not much you can do with these..

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:

Honestly, I don't spend much time wondering what others notice but if there's something I wish they would notice it'd be that despite the silly ways, I have a sensitive side. I'm not one to hide much--so they see my sensitive, passionate, outspoken side pretty quickly.
Kind of lost me here.. but you could shorten up to the point.. example Despite my silly ways, I'm outspoken and have a sensitive side.


The things I can't live without are:

* Good friends and their companionship
* Laughter
* Books
* Learning - intellectual stimulation ( already said this in another above
* New shoes
You can add a little to each one to make them shine!
Books.. I need more shelves
Shoes need more closet space

If you like humor and laughter you got to show yours too!!
The first thing people notice about me:
Not sure what others notice about me. I think it may be that I'm friendly and smile easily--I also find it easy to share light hearted conversations with strangers.
Your answer for what you WISH people would notice would go better here.. since you people notice that quickly

Some additional information I want you to know:

I enjoy the simple things in life and am new to Portland. I'd like to get to know someone as friends first, see if we click and then take it from there. I love to laugh and I'm looking for someone to share my mischievous side with.
Okay .. I would put the new to Portland thing first though. people read left to right, we men skim!! lol This whole section is a bit cliche and in 90% of the profiles..


My interests
I typically spend my leisure time:

I enjoy spending time outdoors--I love hiking and try to get out as much as possible. I also like reading--mostly historical fiction. I love experiencing new cuisines. I do kickboxing (muay thai). At times, I just like to slow down and relax--this would mean relaxing at home with a good book and maybe watching a movie. In general, I'm am typically up for anything and like being on the go.
Good stuff inside, imo just needs to flow better..

I'm hoping you can provide some thoughts of my profile. What kind of person does this give you a feel for? Obviously it doesn't/shouldn't appeal to everyone but I'm wondering if this gives potential matches a good feel for who I am.

The one thing I am most passionate about:
I'm most passionate about being happy, being challenged, new experiences, travel, experiencing new cultures, new tastes, enjoying the beautiful outdoors and laughter.

The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
I don't think there is one single quality that is most important. There are too many that work in unison in finding that special person It's important that someone be positive--see the glass half full--and like to have fun and laugh!! Honesty, a sense of humor, trustworthiness, being humble and laughing at oneself are important.
I'm looking for someone that is honest with himself, someone who is quick to give, slow to take.

The most influential person in my life has been:
There's isn't any one person who has been the most influential. There are so many positive qualities you can learn from others, whether they're friends, family or acquaintances. I find I am most influenced by seeing how others overcome hardships.

The three things which I am most thankful for:
* My health
* My friends and family!
* Learning from past experiences

Three of my best life-skills are:
* Continuing to expand my knowledge and awareness
* Being a good friend and companion
* Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
Honestly, I don't spend much time wondering what others notice but if there's something I wish they would notice it'd be that despite the silly ways, I have a sensitive side. I'm not one to hide much--so they see my sensitive, passionate, outspoken side pretty quickly.

The first thing people notice about me:
Not sure what others notice about me. I think it may be that I'm friendly and smile easily--I also find it easy to share light hearted conversations with strangers.

Some additional information I want you to know:
I enjoy the simple things in life and am new to Portland. I'd like to get to know someone as friends first, see if we click and then take it from there. I love to laugh and I'm looking for someone to share my mischievous side with.

I typically spend my leisure time:
I enjoy spending time outdoors--I love hiking and try to get out as much as possible. I also like reading--mostly historical fiction. I love experiencing new cuisines. I do kickboxing (muay thai). At times, I just like to slow down and relax--this would mean relaxing at home with a good book and maybe watching a movie. In general, I'm am typically up for anything and like being on the go.