Profile review please

Occupation:Strategic Marketing Age:52Height:5' 4"Wants Kids:Maybe
Ethnicity:White, non-HispanicReligion:Christian Drinks:About once a weekSmokes:Never

All fine

The most influential person in her life has been:

My grandmother. She was an amazing and accomplished woman. She taught me strength with compassion, to be happy and not worry, to help others, to love life and embrace its challenges, to dream.

Nothing wrong with this as such. There is no single thing which grabs the eye, though. Is there something evocative to punch it up a little, something you particularly associate with her, a memory, an anecdote ? Sorry, it probably runs against instincts to do so. It would mine if someone suggested I do this.I have seen this done in a couple of profiles, and it worked from a "show, not tell" point of view.

The three things which she is most thankful for:

• My children. They enrich my world.
• My other family. I have been blessed with supportive and enriching family relationships.
• I am lucky to have a rewarding career, wonderful experiences, great relationships

I concur with another poster. The inclarity of my "my other family" ought to be rectified. I naturally assume that this refers to your extended family, parents, siblings, aunts, uncles, cousins, nieces, nephews and so on. There was however the thought at the back of mind which kept on insisting "Could she be talking about bigamy. No ! Really ?"

Three of her best life-skills are:

• Being a good friend and companion
• Finding creative solutions to everyday problems
• Using humor to make friends laugh

No need for comment here

The one thing she wishes MORE people would notice about her is:

I really don't know. Maybe that I am Canadian. Yep I AM that nice, eh.

This seems like a non-sequitor.

The things she can't live without are:

• My 3 children
• Music - eclectic tastes depending on my mood
• Books- I read every day.
• Great Coffee (see 1 above)
• Exploration - new places, people, ideas

I concur with another poster on the fourth point. My reading is that the first point (Your three children), necessitate the fourth (Great coffee). It couldn't possibly refer to the "Passions" question (Question 1), but that is where I looked for clarification first. The intention is humorous, therefore. This will come off in the manner intended, after clarification, I think.

The first thing people notice about her is:

I am easy to talk to - I am really interested in other people and their stories and it shows.

Okay, as with "Most Influential Person" this a place which could be used to make your profile stand out a little more. Would you consider removing "....and it shows." at the end ?

Some additional information she wanted you to know is:

My life is busy but not too busy for a great relationship. I am an open person who shares freely. And I love to laugh. Can you make me laugh?

Okay. I rather like the challenge at the end. Tick

My interests

She typically spends her leisure time:

Anything outdoors - especially if it is near the water. A beach day is a good day. Going to the theatre, cooking and entertaining. Reading. I love to travel - everything from camping to 5 star hotels. I love art and museums and am a very amateur but enthusiastic photographer. Antiquing, refinishing furniture and quilting. I exercise because it is good for me but I would rather ride a bike or do something else active.

Good.

The last book she read and enjoyed:

The Kite Runner. Fascinating description of a very interesting culture I didn't know enough about. I confess to relaxing with chicklit too.

Timely. I have been seeing a television miniseries of the adaptation advertised. Tick

According to my friends:

Her friends describe her as:

• Affectionate
• Happy
• Optimistic
• Intelligent

Good. I would normally write "no need for comment here". The combination of affectionate, happy and optimistic appeals, however.

One thing that only her best friends know is:

I have lived in three countries and loved each one.

Awful question. Deletion is apparently underway. It serves as the feeder line for the same punchline ("Now that would be telling" or "You'd have to be my best friend to find out" a smilie or lol is often added), induces a resistive response, or is deflected with a non-sequitor in almost every profile I have seen. You have gone with the non-sequitor approach. The best responses I have seen are humorous non-sequitors.
The absolute best was "that I really do like spinach and brussels sprouts".

Might this be an approach you would be willing to take ?

One thing I struggle with is that my kids are younger than most women my age have - I can't seem to work that in without it seeming too off putting - ideas? Any feedback will be greatly appreciated!

The one thing Cynthia is most passionate about:
My family. I love travel, movies, reading, cooking, entertaining and the outdoors. Discussing just about any topic with friends. Learning something new.