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The one thing Brendon is most passionate about: Helping others see the beauty that I see, whether it's in themselves or in the world around them. If I can do this with my words, my acting, my music, or my writing, I will.


The most important thing Brendon is looking for in a person is: Trust and understanding.

• About Me

Basic Information

Occupation:Currently an actor, waiter, and writer. Age:27Height:6' 0"Wants Kids:Yes
Ethnicity:White, non-HispanicReligion:Christian Drinks:A few times a yearSmokes:A few times a year


In my own words

The most influential person in my life has been:

I would say J.R.R Tolkien. His writings inspired me in what it means to be a man of honor and dignity, to serve others and to take a great journey of sacrifice for others. He also showed me the wonder of good friends and companionship, and also of how a woman can inspire a man in ways that go beyond physical desire. All of this I saw at an early age, and I know it has helped shape my view of life for years.


The three things which I am most thankful for:

• For being raised with Love and kindness by parents, family, and a loving God.
• For the fact I am allowed to wake up each morning to experience the new day, not all can say the same.
• I am thankful for the talents I have been given and the God who gave them to me.

I agree with livenlearn regarding the 'not all can say the same' statement. I understand what you're trying to say, but this could be reworded.
On the nitpicky grammar side, is there a reason 'Love' is capitalized in the first bullet?

Three of my best life-skills are:

• Achieving personal goals
• Communicating my innermost thoughts and feelings
• Finding pleasure and contentment in simple things

The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me is:

That I am an intimate person that loves to talk from the heart. I wish more people would ask me what I'm thinking about when I get a serious look on my face, because it is then that I most want to share what I'm thinking. I often think people don't want to hear what it is I have to say when I get like that.

Grammar: Speak would be better than talk in the first sentence.
Content: Agree with Sassafras that the last sentence could use revision.


The things I can't live without are:

• A relationship with God
• Living near the woods and fields
• Being around people everyday
• Good music to sing to
• Reading and writing to my heart's content

The first thing people notice about me is:

That I'm confident and that I wear my heart on my sleeve.


Some additional information I wanted you to know is:

I love the outdoors, to walk and be amongst nature, hiking and climbing whenever and wherever the notion takes me. I also love to talk, to listen, and to write. I am well spoken and a people person, rarely shy and always love to be around others. I am also a bit of nerd in that I always love the Lord of the Rings and find it one of the most beautiful series of books ever written. I easily admit I am not perfect, but i will always strive for it.

Grammar: 4th sentence, should be 'I have always loved the Lord of the Rings...' Last sentence, 'i' should be capitalized.
Content: Not sure how crazy I am about the last sentence. It's good to be striving for goals, but perfection? I would consider revising the sentence.


My interests

I typically spend my leisure time:

I enjoy reading lots of literature, singing along with all of my music, and writing. I love to watch a lot of different movies, action, drama, or ones that make you cry. I love to talk to friends and spend time with people. I also like to walk outside and enjoy the day, sometimes even if it's raining outside.

Grammar: After movies, should be a semicolon or colon.
Content: This is really nitpicky, but you might want to revise third sentence to say 'talk with friends' instead of to. Also, might be worthwhile to expand on what you do when you spend time with people - this is your chance to give your matches a better sense of who you are.

The last book I read and enjoyed:

The last book I read was "The Four Loves" by CS Lewis. Wonderful book, and he is always a joy to read. The section labeled "Eros" was particularly interesting.

Grammar: Second sentence - suggest 'Wonderful book; he is always...'
Content: I would expand on what the book is about.

According to my friends:

My friends describe me as:

• Romantic
• Perceptive
• Spiritual
• Passionate