Hi Gr8Guy,
I'm going to apologize right from the start to get it over with - I'm going to be a little blunt, but I'm only trying to help here
"A strong family life leads the way followed by good friendships.
It is important that my match be as dedicated to building a strong long term relationship as I.
I like the opener. It conveys your strong family values and appreciation of important people in your life.
Be an equal partner in building the relationship. Will communicate their feelings, thoughts and desires honestly and openly, I can't read minds and my crystal ball is broken. Hopefully the ultimate goal will be marriage.
This part is probematic for me. I don't mean to sound too emotional, but the purpose of the profile is to convery information as well as emotion. You do well with information. But the emotion I'm getting is disillusionment and some bitterness based on past experiences. And the last thing I want to do is battle and balance out the effects of your past relationships, not right from the start. I would personally close based on this.
How about rephrasing slightly, something like
I'd love to have a crystal ball to read minds, but unfortunately it's been broken for a while now. So, I'd like to meet a lady, who will communicate her feelings, thoughts and desires honestly and openly, be my equal partner in building our relationship over time, with a shared ultimate goal of marriage.
I tried to use your own words for the most part. But it sounds a little warmer and less bitter.
There are also many other things I care about."
I like this part. But I would add something like "
and I would love to share them with you when we meet" -
adds a little intrigue, which can never hurt, and makes it a little more personal to your reader.
Hope this is of some assistance to you.
Good luck! You sound like a Gr8Guy even n2009 to me